Yesterday was a really bad day for me, not just bad but also an unlucky day!! The day started by, my dad going to the doctor's at 6 am and I had to wake up at 6:30 am then I had to run downstairs(almost about to trip at my last step), but luckily I hadn't gotten hurt, because otherwise it would have been a mess! So I run down and ate my breakfast as fast I could.
After all that my dad calls and tells me that he is going to be late and he is going to arrive at 7:55 am, I knew that this was going to be bad because I knew that I was going to be tardy at school.
After my dad arrives I run to the car and my dad drives as fast as possible to get to my school! As soon as I arrive "beeeeeeeeeeeep," the bell had rung(man, I am soo unlucky!!). My dad was really frustrated because his meeting starts at 8:10 am and he has to go to the school's office and get a pass for me!! Finally after getting the pass I run to science class and give the pass to Mrs. Post!
6 comments:
Good story, but you have to check your grammar. Instead of writing a long sentence try to split them in two or more short ones, but it was good. I could understand that it was an unlucky day :S
Fix your commas, they're in the wrong places, also work on your grammar.
nice story, but it was a little dull. make it more exciting. Also some grammar errors
(ex: eat-ate)
kind of boring and slow paced you need to make it more interesting
Thanks for sharing.
Action, dialogue, and inner thought would spice up your story.
Read Weekly Words to see what I mean.
It was okay, a little depressing and you should gramar check once in a whil. dont forget sentences can be divided.
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